The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/07
Very nice--you have a knack for putting the reader right in the moment, enhanced by writing in present tense. A minor slip into past tense toward the end, and watch out of cliched phrases in the first paragraph. This is a very strong entry, and I very much enjoy reading about the father-daughter bond.
I like this. Good perspective. Good point.
02/11/07
I like that your dad felt it an honor to bait your hook. I remember when my dad baited mine for me! I loved your last line. Good job.
03/10/07
While reading this article, I felt like I was right there. Great lessons on memories and enjoying Gods gifts.
03/12/07
I can smell the bacon sandwiches now. Weren't they good? Mmmm, Mmmm, Mmmm.
Well written. Really liked the "flow". God bless and keep writing.