The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/07
Pretty exciting, and I love the symbolism of the lighthouse.

Be careful of switching tenses--most of this is in present tense, but you slip into past every now and then.

I really like the way you put us right there in the boat.
02/09/07
I especially liked the repetition of if Johnny could see the lighthouse. Good job.