The Official Writing Challenge
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I really loved this. It kept my attention all the way through.

The reason I read yours first was because of the title....very fitting.

Keep writing!
Enjoyed this. It has a good moral without being over "moralized".
The title made me want to read your story - good job! Also I liked your use of description, especially the coffee, to help color Viky's emotions...You may want to stay away from certain phrases like, "Conscientious Emily" and "Bone dry." But over all I liked it and had a good feel for the conflict and the characters! Good Job!
Very nice story and very believable. I enjoyed this. Thanks so much for sharing it.
The thing that struck me about his story is the role reversal angle. Isn't it usually the woman who wants children first? It did keep me reading to the end of the story so that was good. I thought the main characters change of atitude was rather abrupt. If I had more insight into the character it would feel more natural. All in all I found your story enjoyable. I read your article because it's down at the end of the list and not as many people may read it as they would read the stories at the top.