The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/07
You captured the woman's emotion very well. This needs paragraphs to make it easier to read. Start a new paragraph when someone new starts to speak. There were also some punctuation problems. You did a great job keeping the story realistic.
I especially like the point that trusting is harder than forgiving. I had never thought of it that way. It's so true.