The Official Writing Challenge
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01/18/07
There is much to be commended here--a narrator with a great voice, and a main character that we really care about.

Some additional clarification would help--who is the narrator, and what is his/her relationship to Geraint?

And the "black-edged" envelope really jars--since you've already resolved the main conflict of this story, I think it'd be stronger without it.

The real story--losing and re-gaining his love, through the writing of letters--is very strong and well done.
01/20/07
This is a very touching story, though I agree with the previous comment. You definitely have a gift for characterization and I encourage you to keep writing!