The Official Writing Challenge
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12/15/06
I like this story! Very nice. I love this: "she basked in the solitude of nature’s ringtones." Good descpriptive writing, and a nice ending. Well done!
Well written, but for a few small typo's. Good story, like the way it ended, very nice.
Try to seperate your paragraph's with spaces. This makes it much easier to read. I recieved this comment twice before I finally listened.
I loved this! Your story really pulled me in! It brought tears to my eyes... and really made me think...

One thing... separating your paragraphs is a good idea.
This had a lot of qualities a good story needs: suspense, visuals and a good ending! Take the suggestions above and you'll have a winner!
12/15/06
This story definitely drew me in and kept me in suspense. So glad for prayer warriors like that. Nice work.