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A beautifully written and powerful story! Description and characterization are all excellent; I could see and feel with the narrator all the way up to the tragic ending. This one deserves to place!
Really, really good. I was absolutely engrossed from the title to the end. My favourite line:
Today the conscience he crucified, resurrected.

I spotted one typo - should have not should of. But this does not detract from what is a very powerful piece of writing that deserves to place.
Wow! this is very moving. A masterful character study. I was truly touched by this. Very well done.
You had me at HELLO!!!!!
An appropriate title and quite a story. The characters were fairly 'real' and I could feel the pain of the MC. Sad at the end to see that he decided to take his own life, otherwise, good job.
(Thanks for commenting on An Amber-eyed adventure!)