The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/06
Good job! I can relate with little girl, only my situation is the opposite. I’m a hard core country guy, that’s been forced into the city. As a redneck, I really enjoyed your allegory with the cows! Your paragraphing was a little awkward, and spacing between speakers would help. Other than that, I really enjoyed this piece.
12/13/06
Slightly weak on topic-but great tie in at the end. I loved the feel of the story and of the bond between the parent-daughter. Great job with this :)