The Official Writing Challenge
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12/04/06
I like this. Very moving.
Thanks.
12/04/06
Wonderful story showing great emotion! Good ending and great detail without being too flowery - good verbs. Please consider breaking it into smaller paragraphs for easier reading - you wouldn't want people passing it by due to huge paragraphs when it is so well written!