The Official Writing Challenge
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11/24/06
I loved this story and its message! I could really relate to it because I was bullied and often rejected by kids all through school, and my older daughter also suffered through this in elementary school. It is a real problem and I applaud anyone who takes it seriously and addresses it!

I could see and feel with your little boy character; you made him come alive. Great job!
This is a good one.The detail was great.

There used to be a few people that teased me too. My Mom didn't stand for it. It helped it not to sink in really.
11/27/06
Good message that was delivered well. Keep up the good work. God bless.
11/28/06
This was well written and kept my attention throughout. Thanks for giving us a glimpse of a scene that is played out every day in our schools. The only criticism I have is it might be a little short on topic. Overall, though, it was a marvelous story.
11/29/06
Excellent detail throughout this story. I wish you had somehow woven your "point" more into the piece, rather than stating it at the end. This was a great description, though. Nice job!