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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Parent (11/16/06)

TITLE: The Encounter
By DeWayne Bricker
11/18/06


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The Macalister’s had set out from their home for a weekend drive.
They were six hours from their house when the right back tire blew out causing them to pull off the interstate. Jim was the father of the clan; a strong man with a Godly heart. He was a banker and a deacon in his local Church. His wife Judy was the epitome of a good mother. She had raised their two children Rob and Cindy by the book; the Holy Book that is.

“Hey dad, you want me to change it?” Rob asked.

“Hey, I may be old, but I can still change a tire better than you can.” Jim replied.

Judy piped up and said: “Why don’t you both change it so we can get underway.”

“Yea, hurry up you guys; I’d like to get there in the daylight so I can see the mountains and the snow.” Cindy chimed.

“You mean see the boys, don’t you?” Rob replied sarcastically.

As they were putting the finishing touches on the situation a grungy looking man stepped out of the woods about ten yards from them. Startled by his appearance Rob recoiled and gently grabbing his father’s shoulder. Jim saw the man and motioned for Rob to get in the driver’s seat. Rob understood and calmly walked around the car and got in.

“Lock your doors.” Rob said."

Sensing his tension Judy and Cindy turned to see the two talking. They seemed to be having a friendly conversation.

“What’s wrong; who is that man?” Cindy asked.

“I don’t know; he just appeared out of the woods.” Rob replied.

Fear gripped each of them as they watched. The two men walked around the back of the vehicle.

“Robby, get out there and tell dad it’s time to go.” Cindy said.

“No, you stay right there; you’re father can handle it.” Judy replied.

Rob adjusted the mirror to get a better view of his father. He reached under the seat and pulled out a small revolver. His mother gasped.

“Where did that come from?” She asked.

“I talked dad into getting it for the trip in case something like this should happen.” Rob replied.

Both women froze in terror knowing something terrible was about to happen.

“No matter what happens stay in the car.” Rob said.

Afraid, Cindy reached over the seat and took her mother’s strong hand. Judy gripped hers back with a sense of strength and assuredness.

Looking straight in her daughter’s eyes Judy said: “Pray with me.”

The two bowed and began reciting the Lord’s Prayer.

Rob checked his mirror and saw his father fall to his knees with his head down and arms by his side. He could not see the stranger. Terror took hold of his mind and for a moment he could not mover.

“What’s wrong with you?” Rob thought to him self.

“Move.” Rob whispered.

His mother and sister were still praying.

He checked the mirror again and saw his father face down on the ground with his hands lifted in front of his own face as if blocking something.

“He’s going to shoot your father, you coward. Get a hold of yourself and help him.” Rob thought to him self.

His mother and sister’s praying seemed to grow louder and louder. His mind began spinning. He felt light headed and weak. He was just about to pass out when he heard his father’s voice. He regained him self and looked in the mirror again. His father was on his knees again with his hands together looking up at the man. Rob could not see the intruder but there seemed to be a light shining in his father’s face.

“He’s begging for his life.” Rob thought.

“That’s it; die or not; I’ve got to help him.”

He opened the door and saw his father’s wonderful smile looking at him.

“Dad, what happened? You were; I mean he was. . . “

“It’s okay son that man came here to stop us because the bridge is out. He said God sent him.”

“But you were on your knees; I thought he was going . . .”

“It’s okay, son; I think he was an angel. I just took a moment to praise God for being such a good Father to me.”

“Are you okay, son?”

“I am now. I love you dad.”

“I love you too son.”

Judy and Cindy looked up.

“Is he gone?” They asked?

Both men smiled.


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Donna Emery11/24/06
A very captivating story and it was very good to read. Nice job.
Leigh MacKelvey11/25/06
A little suspense and a nice surprise!I thought that the grungy old man was leading the father to Christ at first! I liked that he was an angel. Great writing. Keep it going!
Sara Harricharan 11/29/06
Whoa! What an ending! This was great suspense. You held my attention all the way through, very realistic characters and a good ending. Great job!