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This is one of the better devotionals on the theme of Jesus-as-Lifeguard. My only suggestion is to stay in the first person, rather than switch to second person as you did in the 2nd or 3rd paragraph.

Very nicely done.
I liked this. The beginning sucked me in. The things that were 'not happening' on the nice days made me laugh.

Extremely mesmerized by the ocean myself, I love to read other people's thoughts of it. You wrote about the roaring waves and then the restful, peaceful beauty; just needs some editing to make it professional - but a nice beginning. Keep up the good work; with time and practice you can make it happen.