The Official Writing Challenge
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Excellent work. Your story drew me right in.
11/16/06
Excellent re-telling! I liked the phrase about "his mother's old cookpot", and several others.

Instead of the internal footnotes, consider an endnote that simply reads "Based on Matthew 14 and Psalm 69." Less interruption of the flow that way.

Good job of showing us Peter's spirit.
11/18/06
You're a beginner? Well done!
Wonderful rendition of Peter's walking on the water.