The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/06
You did a super job of sustaining the watery metaphors throughout this narrative.

A few errors in spelling and punctuation; nothing major.

I like the sparse narrative style here--it really fits with the content of the piece.
11/19/06
A very good story and I also enjoyed your use of metaphor. So glad it had a happy ending