The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/06
Great title, and you did a good job with the irony of this situation.

This piece would be immensely better with a closer edit for spelling, punctuation, capitalization. If these areas are difficult for you, perhaps you could find a "challenge buddy" who'd be willing to work on mechanics?

Love your lifeguard character, he's an interesting person.
11/19/06
A very good story. You kept my interest. Nice job.