The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/06
First of all, this is a great reminder to all Christians. I think all of us try to do it on our own sometimes, forgetting about our lifeguard.

Try putting some more space between paragraphs. It makes it much easier on the eyes. You are missing a few commas also. Try varying your sentence length and structure.

Again, a great reminder. Keep on writing.
11/19/06
This is very true and you brought out your point very well. I suggest that you use paragraphs to make it easier to read. Keep writing!
11/20/06
You have a great premise here, with some wonderful points! I agree that dividing it into more paragraphs would be very helpful. Thanks for sharing your heart!