The Official Writing Challenge
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11/18/06
Though weak on topic, this was a nice piece telling of all Jesus is to us. Keep writing!
11/18/06
I like the structure of this poem, with the repeated first lines, and the chronological ordering. I agree, though, it's almost as if "lifeguard" were thrown in as an afterthought. There are some very moving images and phrases in this entry.