The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/06
What an exciting story! Think about writing a full-length version of it some day.

Be careful with punctuation (seas, not sea's) and capitalization (Lord, not lord).

Thanks for sharing this with us!
11/18/06
A wonderful story of the Lord's protection! Keep writing!
Good story, could have used a bit more detail, though. Maybe a little about what you do or what the area looked like. This usually adds a bit to a story while keeping it's original context accurate. I'm glad the God kept you safe.
I love hearing God stories. Your way of morphing a traditional lifeguard into Jesus as guarding our lives is refreshing. Thank you for sharing.
11/18/06
Great story! It shows us that God is always with us every step of the way.
11/23/06
Great story. Needs to be broken down into paragraphs with spacing. The Lord's name needs to be capitalized...and some editing...but really a very nice true to life story of Jesus love. Keep at it...practice makes perfect.
11/23/06
Thank you for sharing your story. Perhaps next time you can expand it a bit and help us to "see" the story unfold. Keep writing!