Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Lifeguard (11/09/06)
-
TITLE: Can You Hear Me? | Previous Challenge Entry
By dub W
11/10/06 -
LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
ADD TO MY FAVORITES
Bits and pieces of memory began to flash in my mind. My office, I had been in my office, reading a report, I had stayed late to catch up on old work. One of the janitors was emptying my trashcan then nothing until the moment I woke in this very damp place.
“Help me,” a weak voice broke the stillness.
“Who’s there?”
There was a moment’s pause then silence was pierced again. “Help me.”
“Who’s calling, where are you?” I had no sense of direction, and barely a sense of my own being.
“Help me.” The voice was fainter, but still I could pick it up.
“I don’t know who or where you are, or even what happened. Can you hear me?” I tried to raise myself up but it soon became evident I was lying atop something - because I teetered. “I don’t think I can move too far, where are you?”
“Help me.” The voice was weak.
“Someone will come for us, you gotta have faith, just hang on.”
There was no response and I honestly felt a twinge of loneliness and needed to hear the voice. “Are you still there?”
A cough, and then a whimper, the words were indistinguishable.
“Hey, can you hear me?”
“Jeeesusss, lovvvess me, thisss I knownnnn, for theaaaa.”
I continued for my new friend, “Bible tells me so.”
Another cough. “Cristo me ama, cristo me ama, cristo me ama, La Biblia dice asi.”
“I’m sorry, I don’t speak much Espanol.” It must be one of the cleaning people. My neighbor-in-peril, didn’t understand me, couldn’t hear me, or ignored me, because the week voice started again.
“Cristo me ama, pues morí."
I responded, “Jesus loves me he who died.”
“Y el cielo me abrirá.”
“Heaven’s gate to open wide.” I was struggling to remember my third grade Sunday School songs. But, my neighbor seemed to have the message well in hand. I waited for his response.
A cough and then, “él mis culpas quitará." The voice stopped abruptly and breathed loudly with a groan. At the same time I thought I heard a rumble.
There was a tremendous crashing of lumber and glass, I began to panic, but as I moved I felt my platform tip sideways.
“Hey, you okay?” I couldn’t think of anything to say except to quickly start the song again. “Jesus loves me, this I know, yes Jesus loves me,” I mixed the verse but hoped to raise some attention. The only response was more crashing; I knew at any minute my platform would be toppled into some abyss. “Hey partner, if you can hear me, I think Jesus has a plan for us and we may be headed there together.” I truly thought my English was beyond the grasp of my new friend but I was praying for that unseen voice as hard as I could.
Suddenly, boards over me moved, and a cold breeze blew over my body. Two giant arms embraced by upper body and I was lifted up into a bucket attached to a truck.
I waved my arm. “Hey, there’s someone else down there.”
The man holding my shoulders just patted my back. “Yeah, we know,” he said, “we just got him out a minute ago, he told us about you, he called you his guardia de vida, I think that means life guard.”
--------
“Jesus Loves Me”
Words By: Anna B. Warner
Music By: Wm. B. Bradbury
Translation by: Spanish Christian Lyrics
The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.
Otherwise, pretty good reading :)
Enjoyed the story's ending, too--how the two victimized characters each thought of the other's rescue!