The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/06
Larry is certainly delightfully different, and I'd be interested in a longer story about him, perhaps telling about some of his rescues--both from water and from sin.

I was tripped up by a few details: it would be difficul to sing during a strenuous rescue, and I really don't think ordinary Christians sing on Sundays and then curse their wives the rest of the week.

I'd encourage you to edit and expand this--Larry's a character worth getting to know better.
I like the part about Larry having two jobs. Made me smile. And, I could envision Larry singing when pulling someone to safety. Good visual descriptions.

I did notice a little trouble with your "tense", a problem I have to work on too.

Good work.

11/17/06
Amen.
Larry is someone I'd love to know. He sounds like he lives out his testimony. Keep writing!
11/18/06
Larry does seem like a unique character. To be Christlike 24/7 is something we should all strive for.

Thank you sharing.
11/23/06
A sweet story of a lifeguard named Larry; with some very good reminders for all of us to think about and REMEMBER. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.