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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Doctor/Nurse (11/02/06)

TITLE: In the Face of Death
By Angie Thurston
11/08/06


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A thousand times He’s sat here
To pronounce impending death,
A thousand times He’s listened
As they try to catch their breath.
He leans forward in his chair
Looks death right in the face,
His voice booms the verdict
Of his patient’s final case.
His diagnosis brings on the scene
Heaviness and fear,
Silence is the normal response
Once the outcome becomes clear.
Was that laughter he was hearing?
Maybe she heard him wrong?
There’s nothing funny about death
She would face it before long.
Was she laughing, really?
He sat there quite perplexed,
He leaned back slowly in his chair
Annoyed and rather vexed.
The shock just hasn’t hit her yet
Soon she would understand,
There was nothing he could do for her
Her life, death did demand.
“Your reaction is very different
From those who have come before,
I cannot see the humor
In knocking on death’s door.”
The patient looked him in the eyes
With a smile across her face,
“Doctor, please don’t worry about me
I’ll go to a better place.”
“I don’t understand that”
The Doctor did reply,
But something did seem different
No tears or heavy sigh.
“Why did you laugh?”
He questioned her with absolute attention,
“Because my Lord has conquered death
For me there is no tension.
He came to earth to set me free
Sin and death defeating,
And if it be that I should die
I look forward to our meeting.
To be with Him in all His glory
Is everything I crave,
Therefore I laugh at death and hell
I do not fear the grave.”
“That makes no sense to me at all”
The doctor softly said,
“I see death’s darkness everyday
The sorrow and the dread.
How can you stay so tranquil
When you, it came to claim?
You tell me that your Lord did this?
Please share with me His name.”
With great delight and happy tears
He took Jesus in his heart
Death came to take a life that day
But life it did impart.
Now when he takes his chair
To announce impending doom,
He prays for healing laughter
And love to fill the room.
He tells them about Jesus
And the sacrifice He made,
He tells them of the girl
Whose laughter will never fade.


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Leigh MacKelvey11/10/06
I liked this poem. It is original and the message is clear. The only thing I would suggest is to read it for the rhythm again and see if there are places where it doesn't read as smoothly as others. I got cuaght up in several places where the words didn't seem to flow with the overall rhythm.Possibley cnage some words to fit the rhytm. other than that, Bravo!
Phyllis Inniss 11/14/06
A splendid job you did with this poem. Perhaps you should not even be in the Beginners group. The delivery and ideas you expressed were truly excellent. However, I agree with what the previous writer said about the rhythm flow in one or two places.
Sue Dent11/14/06
Ohhhh, I like this!!! I reeeeeally like this!! Just a teeeensy bit of rythm tightening but nothing major. And I'd add some spaces but hey, that won't change how good it is!!! Did I mention that I liked this!!!
Catrina Bradley 11/14/06
Ditto, Ditto, and Ditto. I absolutely love this line:
Death came to take a life that day
But life it did impart.
Excellent!
Julianne Jones11/17/06
I loved this when I first read it when judging and was thrilled to see that you'd placed. Congrats and great writing. Jules
Kristina LeCroy11/17/06
This was absolutely beautiful. You used it to convey emotion and a person that is usually the most desperate is the one evangelizing to others. Wonderful!