The Official Writing Challenge
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This is just as good the second read through. Good job!
11/11/06
I'm glad Jayne got to tell the doctor this happy news. God bless the faithful doctors and nurses who aren't afraid to share the good news with their patients. Nice work!
11/13/06
A lovely story, with much hope and realism. Keep writing!
11/14/06
This was funny to read at first, then very moving as the story progressed, wonderful job in capturing a wide range of emotions. :)
This is well-written, capturing several emotions. I think there might be a word missing, prehaps "to?" It is in the sentence "The news seemed devasted her." Or maybe you meant "The news devastated her." I do that sort of thing a lot when I edit my pieces. All in all, this was a good read with a wonderful message to all of us to witness to others. Nicely done.
Good vivid discriptions here. Flows nicely and your title fits. Great writing! One thing I might change is to capitalize he and him when referring to God. May the Lord continue to guide your quill as you write to glorify HIM.