The Official Writing Challenge
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11/07/06
I DO thank my teachers for teaching me to read! :) It is one of my favorite pastimes!

I appreciate the message of your article, and agree with you on the importance of all the teachers in our lives--our parents, school educators, and especially the Lord. I realize it is very difficult being a Christian teacher in the public schools, but our loving and caring words and actions can preach the gospel for us!
11/08/06
I like the structure of this, with ever-smaller paragraphs that narrow down to the real heart of your message.

I think you'd get more readers if you start off with a "punch", and leave off the topic and title. Let your readers dive right into the story without having to wade through the unnecessary labels.

Your last two paragraphs were particularly lovely.