The Official Writing Challenge
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10/27/06
What I like- the voice behind the words:) Loved the flow and the style. I felt like I was watching the tv show Desperate Houswives - (okay - I admit I watched it a few times)and this was a street in normal America where everyone goes on with their normal lives. I really liked how you kept me intrigued about what would happen. Great job!!
What I might change - hmmm...watch your 'had' with your verbs. there were a few that the tense could be changed.
10/30/06
This was very nice. It helped me remember that it doesn't take much to encourage or enable another person to carry out their mission for God. And that can be our mission, if we choose to follow. Good job!