The Official Writing Challenge
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10/30/06
What I like- you used some very descriptive words...some nice scenes and a good opening. Very nice!
What I might change - I can tell you write well ...what I might do to this story is add some dialogue and don't tell as much. You wrote an entire book almost in a short few words. Try taking one significant event in this couple's life and really focusing on that. I think you will be surprised at the impact it might have. Also try to tie in a main idea - not just a story - what did the characters learn or what can the reader take away with them.
Keep writing - you have sooo much of it down already!!:)
10/30/06
This is an excellent story! What a wonderful romance and a beautiful tale of God's timing. I really enjoyed this. Well done!