The Official Writing Challenge
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10/20/06
This was absolutely beautiful. You have a wonderful gift for story-telling, I really enjoyed reading this!
10/21/06
Great story, full of suspense. A title that better reflects the "warfare" aspect of this exciting story might be something to think about. Top notch!
10/22/06
An excellent depiction of spiritual warfare. I enjoyed reading this and could really imagine the scene through your words. Well done!
10/23/06
Good writing and a perceptible voice, thank you. I wondered about this passage: "At that instant, the noise of the swords ceased and miraculously the hands raised against each other in violence met each other in mid-air for a conciliatory handshake." Were those spiritual hands or the hands of gang members? If they are spiritual hands, I would have like to have seen what the gang members did at this point.

Thank you for a good story.