The Official Writing Challenge
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10/19/06
This was cute and quite enjoyable to read.
10/21/06
A very cute and sweet story. I can see the little soldiers now. Keep writing!
Your story is creative and well-crafted. My suggestions for improvement would be to make it clear who is speaking and acting. I got a little confused about that toward the end. Also, your sentence "She did, see" should have been two sentences. "She did. See?" Hope that is helpful. Keep up the great work!
10/23/06
Creative, unique and a welcome, enjoyable read. A bit confusing in dialogue - but I liked it immensely.