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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Police (10/12/06)

TITLE: Granny Biker
By
10/16/06


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"This is the Police. Come out with your hands in the air!”

Three police cars parked strategically around the front of the gas station. The alarm had been activated and the police were called in. There had been a spate of break-ins and they had finally caught the culprit in the act. Fire-arms used in the previous two robberies made the police nervous. They guarded themselves behind squad cars where the faint smell of body odor and heated engine oil mingled. Neighbors awakened by the early dawn invasion gathered cautiously outside their homes to observe the commotion.

“Do you hear me? This is Police Officer Brody. Come out with your hands up!”

The door opened slowly, revealing a small laced-up boot. The officers dropped down behind their vehicles, guns cocked.

“Please don’t shoot,” a quiet trembling voice responded.

The door opened a little further and an elderly woman hobbled out. She was stooped low and walked with a cane.

“What the…?”

“Ma’am, please step out into the open and put down your…cane.”

She dropped the cane and raised her hands as far as her skinny arms would allow. Officer Brody stepped forward to access the situation. He motioned Police Officer Mandy Walters to carry out a search. Brody steadied the shaken old lady with his powerful hand under her elbow. Officer Walters placed the crooked walking stick back into an arthritic hand. She obviously didn’t want to embarrass the startled petite woman any further by searching her.

With an indignant expression, the woman faced the officer in charge. “I think there has been a mistake. You see, I left my keys in the bathroom and when I went back in I noticed I had grease on my skirt.” She rubbed at the spot on her weathered skirt.

“I tried to wash it, but I had to take it off because the skirt wouldn’t reach the faucet. I locked myself in so no one would disturb me. Unfortunately, I think the nice man at the counter must have closed up for the night and didn’t realize I was still there.”

“Where is your car, ma’am?”

“Oh! No sir! I don’t own a car. That’s my motorcycle.” She lifted her cane and pointed with her bent fingers past the squad cars and confused police officers. A Harley Davison sheltered under an ancient oak tree glistened in the morning sunlight.

“Ma’am, I find this all hard to believe. Tell me how you were in there all night without triggering the alarm?

“Well, you see… I sat on the toilet seat to adjust my tights and I slipped off into the corner. I was stuck and didn’t have the energy to get up until this morning. When I left the bathroom I was aware that I couldn’t get out so I shook the door. That pesky alarm just kept screaming at me.”

Brody scratched his head, completely mesmerized while she shuffled towards the Harley across the road. She mounted the motorcycle with a little difficulty, but unwavering. She placed an opened-face helmet over her graying, outdated hairstyle. Using her key, the engine started up with a roar. Poking the cane into a side pouch, she flipped the kick-stand up and drove off in one smooth movement. Officer Brody glanced at a smug-faced Walters before replacing his gun into its holster.

“What are you looking at? You can do the report when we get back.”


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Sara Harricharan 10/19/06
This was hilarious! What a story-this was a most enjoyable read! :)
dub W10/19/06
I rarely comment this early, but after I read this, I found myself laughing out loud. What a wonderful humorous story. Beautiful dialogue. Thank you for making my day.
Thomas Kittrell10/19/06
I am glad I was not the one who had to fill out the report. :-)
Thomas
Betty Castleberry10/19/06
Only one word here.....HAHAHAHA!
Okay, a couple more, what fun! Excellent.
Mary Smith10/20/06
Okay, this was really cute, and well written! Poor little old lady, stuck in the bathroom and then confronted by the police... Hehe, very creative!
Donna Emery10/20/06
A very amusing story and it was very well written! I really enjoyed this one!
Carl Halling10/21/06
Cool! Very funny. What an imagination.
Val Clark10/22/06
A very amusing and well told story. Good sense of place. With words to play with I would like to have known more about how Brody felt, especially when Walters didn’t search the old woman as ordered. The old woman is a really well drawn character and not at all what one expects from someone her age. Left me smiling. Well done.
Amy Michelle Wiley 10/22/06
I enjoyed this just as much the second time. Too funny!
Pat Guy 10/23/06
No wonder you are moving up! This is fantastic! Guaranteed to put a smile on the reader's face!

So creative! Even when using the standard police characters. Cool!

Great job Chrissy! :)
william price10/23/06
Besides a very well written story, I'm beginning to feel the confidence of a skilled writer behind the words. I enjoyed the story, but I'm thrilled with how well you are writing. God bless.
Valora Otis10/24/06
Oh! What a funny story! Maybe Granny really did do it! The Harley and how she got away without being searched, made me wonder. This is so funny! Great job Chrissy!
Donna Haug10/24/06
How fun! Somehow I think it would take a supergranny to be able to ride that bike after spending the night stuck in the bathroom. Somehow just the thought makes me giggle.
Jan Ackerson 10/24/06
Love it! I'd give a lot to read the police report...excellent job!
david grant10/25/06
Great job! Gonna give ya a DAVEY for this one!
Cassie Memmer10/26/06
Hilarous! I enjoyed this so much! I did have to wonder about the skirt and getting on the Harley! LOL! Very creative and enjoyable!
Lynda Lee Schab 10/26/06
Too funny! Great imagery - loved the humor. Perfect for "police." Nicely done.
Suzanne R10/26/06
What a fun story. I can almost feel the old lady's indignance. And she rides a Harley in a skirt???! Wow - what a woman. Well written.
Trina Courtenay10/27/06
Loved it! Thanks for putting a smile on my face this morning. Keep up the great work.

Trina<><
Edy T Johnson 01/25/07
I had to read this one out loud to my husband. What a wonderful story, so well told!
Janice Fitzpatrick03/15/07
This is toooooooooooooo great. Beginner at the time? Wow. you are amazing Christee. God bless your talent.Man, oh man,talk about shifting gears when you write each story, no matter what you write you do it well and with such enthusiasm, adding such life and vibrancy to each entry. A+ in my book. (Oh I re-read your message and realized the top 40 and 15 for each group is in the message board,so much for being new at FW,grin. Yay,I did make it for the shopping theme,you're right. Take care hon. Janice
Tabiatha Tallent03/29/07
Too funny! I'm so glad you told where she put the cane, cause I was wondering. Great job!
Joanne Sher 03/29/07
Chrissy - I can't BELIEVE I had never read this before! I just LOVE LOVE LOVE it! What a great imagination and description you presented here.
Patty Wysong03/29/07
Too fun!! I often joke about having white hair and riding a motor scooter...hehe. :-)
Julie Arduini03/29/07
Chrissy!!!! This is just masterful, I'm telling you this is solid, wonderful and just flat out enjoyable. You created a super granny I could just picture down to the last hair. Excellent work, as always. Thanks for the encouraging comments you consistently give in my work.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/04/07
What a delight, Chrissy! I'm so glad you pointed this one out. How did I miss it before??
Esther Gellert06/07/07
Oh, too funny Chrissy. Thanks for pointing me towards it. Now I understand Biker Granny in 'The story' better.