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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Police (10/12/06)

TITLE: Missing
By cherie weber
10/13/06


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The pier crowded with people, seemed smaller than usual. It truly was the gala of the year! the sun shone down brightly. In contrast, the cool ocean breeze whisked threw their hair.

She held her young son's hand as they maneuvered their way down the boardwalk. The festivities were beginning to show its personality, as people smiled and laughed.

In an instant it all changed. Suddenly, the crowd seemed to increase in numbers. She felt as though they were swimming threw an ocean of people. Her grip on her son's hand slipped. And he was gone. People everywhere, and he was not to be seen. Alarm turned to panic as she screamed his name.

Running into the streeet she spotted her friend's teenage son. The terror in her wyes told the story before the words came out.

Yelling to some of his friends, the teenagers began the search. They were
everywhere. They ran. They shouted. They acted the part they played. They were the team. The mission: find the child.

The minutes that passed seemed like hours. As she scanned the boardwalk frantically, she feared the worst and prayed for the best. In a daze, she heard her name. A young man she did not know was pointing to the front of the pier. She followed his pointing finger.

The police substation, was nothing more than a tarp hung atop several poles. In a corner sat her son, with a young police officer. As she came into view, his eyes lit up and he ran to her.


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Sara Harricharan 10/19/06
A short and simple story. It could be expanded just a touch to make it more powerful by a little extra 'show' than 'tell. Good job!
Donna Emery10/20/06
A very sweet and heartwarming story! I was definitely drawn along by your words. Well done!
Aylin Smith 10/20/06
Lovely.
Dennis Fletcher10/23/06
Good story. I saw a couple of spots that I thought could have been expounded upon, but altogether, quite the gripping tale.