The Official Writing Challenge
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10/12/06
Wow. This was quite a story. The ending was kind of sad. But good job! :)
10/13/06
I really liked this story. You were able to bring me into the story and it definitely held my interest to the end. I do have a comment about the conversation between the father and the fire cheif. They were both described as being angry on the phone, but most of the dialogue didn't sound angry. I would think that the father would've sounded a little guilty. The fire cheif definitely should've sounded angry though. In all I really did enjoy this story!
10/14/06
A very intriguing story. You've left me musing what 'take home' message I should draw from it. Of course, not every story has to have a moral, and this is certainly a readable, gripping narrative.
10/15/06
What a sad story. It made me think about how we must pray to truly know where God is leading us, each day. Well written!