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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)

TITLE: Jenny's Weeds
By lynn rodgers
09/13/06


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Jenny wiped the beads of sweat from her brow with a mud covered rag, blew the stray hairs that had fallen from her ponytail out of her face, brushed the soil from her hands on her jeans, and chugged her pink lemonade. She was exhausted, shed been out in the searing heat all afternoon and her work seemed to be going no where. Standing akimbo, she furrowed her brow at the patch of weed and dirt.

She raised her gaze from the weeds to her neighbor’s garden. It was spectacular; bluebonnets, tulips, lilies, daffodils, pansies, and roses grew in full bloom without threat of weeds. A sly grin crept across Jenny’s face, what if Ruby’s garden wasn’t so pretty? What if there were a few dandelions? The next Sunday Ruby would be at church all day so Jenny selected her finest weeds, strutted over to her neighbor’s lawn and placed the weeds in the choicest spots. In no time Ruby would be up to her eyeballs in weeds and would come crying to Jenny for help.

A week went by and Ruby was having weed problems just as Jenny thought but she wasn’t satisfied. Ruby was taking care of the weeds herself and Jenny had to replant the weeds. The second Monday after Jenny started planting the weeds Jenny caught the flu and was stuck inside for three days. She stewed over how much more beautiful Ruby’s garden would be when she got better.

On Thursday Jenny went out to check on the weeds and was in complete shock. Ruby’s garden had weeds in it and Ruby was plucking weeds and planting flowers but not in her own garden. Jenny’s garden was almost completely weed free and beginning to look the way she’d always dreamed.

Jenny was not grateful she was mad, her garden looked great and she didn’t fix it. “What are you doing?” she snapped.

“I noticed that you were sick and your garden needed care,” Ruby beamed.

“You’re not mad at me about planting weeds in your garden?” Jenny let it slip. But she was surprised by Ruby’s answer.

“No, weeds aren’t that big of a problem. God created them to just like the flowers we call beautiful. The trick is not to let imperfections to get you down.” Ruby rose and dusted off her pants. “You up for some lemonade?”

“Sure, I guess. But you’ll have to explain to me what in the world you’re talking about.” The two new friends went inside for lemonade and a chat.


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Sara Harricharan 09/15/06
Excellent character devlopment on Jenny. I loved the story between her and Ruby.
Marty Wellington 09/18/06
Very interesting take on the subject. I noted a few grammatical things like run-on sentences. Your storyline though was solid and it was an enjoyable read. Good character development with Jenny--don't some of us sabotage others to advance ourselves? Story might have benefited from more development of the other girl and why she had a servant heart. Otherwise, very nicely done. Thanks for sharing.
Donna Emery09/18/06
Very nice! What a great story of taking a Spirit-led opportunity! Go, Ruby! Well done.
Everest Alexander09/18/06
Excellent opening paragraph! Very descriptive without getting bogged down in minutia. Good development and flow of the storyline!

There's a saying that goes, "Preach the gospel every chance you get, use words only when absolutely necessary. Ruby epitomises this concept! She showed her faith by her actions!

You just need to pay a little more attention when proofreading next time. All in all, a very good job!
Betty Castleberry09/19/06
Fun story, and a nice ending. Thank you.
Brenda Craig09/19/06
OK, I thought this to be one of the most clever uses of the topic I have seen. Yes, with a little more development and shorter sentences you can improve, but the concept is wonderful. I would encourage you to take some of the suggestions and develop Ruby's personality, and expand this story while we have the break. Very clever. Made me stop and think how my words can sometimes plant weeds in the gardens of others. Great job!!!!!!!!!
Cheryl Harrison 09/19/06
I agree! This is a wonderful take on the topic. This is a keeper. It has a few grammatical issues, but nothing that can't be fixed. Polish it up and submit it somewhere. Good job!
Joanne Sher 09/21/06
Very clever take on the subject - and what a unique way to draw someone to the Lord. Great job!