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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)

TITLE: Garden Disaster
By Leigh MacKelvey


Garden Disaster

It started off right, it started off swell Caviar from the tree, Perrier from a well
A garden so delightful, honey dripping from the vines
Each morning brought its glory and they lived a life divine
The man loved his lady and the lady loved her gent
The landlord kept things tidy and He didn’t charge no rent.
Paradise was perfect, Paradise was plush,
Nobody ever died, nobody made a fuss
Then along came the serpent with a piece of bad advise
He said,
“Lady eat that apple while it’s fresh and ripe.”

“Why thanks, I surely will,
You don’t have to ask me twice.”

If the lady’d only known snakes just aren’t the honest type.

Well now, hell had been restrained by a holy truce
‘til the snake slithered in, then all hell broke loose.....

It was a garden disaster, like a hurricane but faster
Blew the leaves right off the tree,
A garden disaster, didn’t listen to the Master
Landlord changed the locks and key.
It was a garden disaster.
Gent blamed the Lady, Lady blamed the Snake
Snake laughed at them and said

“For goodness sakes. ”
Now you blame, ,
you complain
You blew it all yourself ,
and now you feel the shame!

Well, I didn't do a thing!
Better pack and get on out ..
Just remember
...this won’t be over till
the fat lady sings!”

It was a garden disaster, like a hurricane but faster
Honey dried up on the vines
A garden disaster, didn’t listen to the Master
Man was shown the Exit sign.
It was a garden disaster....

You choose your destination, then
you try to hide!
You give up Paradise and
for what?...your silly pride?!

The Master was prepared with a sweet Disaster Plan
Don’t reject it, accept it,
It's in place for everyman!

And don’t worry ‘bout the fat lady,
don’t wait for her to sing ‘cause
It was all over when
Christ was crowned the King.

It was a garden disaster
like a hurricane but faster
blew the leaves right off the trees
A garden disaster, won’t you listen to the Master?
Won’t you listen to the Master?...
Won’t you listen to the Master?

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Betty Castleberry09/15/06
This made me smile! Very cute way of sharing the Garden of Eden story.
Donna Powers 09/17/06
How amusing! You told the story well. I love the dialect of the narration, and I really enjoyed the way you told the story.
Val Clark09/18/06
A very strong performance piece. Hope you get a chance to perform it!
Sara Harricharan 09/19/06
I absolutely loved this! The verse "And don’t worry ‘bout the fat lady,
don’t wait for her to sing ‘cause
It was all over when
Christ was crowned the King."

Was my favorite, but great job-keep it up!
Jacquelyn Horne04/18/07
I really enjoyed this poem. It's right to the point. It's serious, but somehow I detect a little humor here.
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/05/07
Leigh, this is just a joy--too funny, and yet with a message.
Joanne Sher 07/05/07
Very cute and clever - I will definitely be popping over to free reprints to check out the "new, improved version" ;)
Catrina Bradley 07/06/07
Me too on Joanne's! I found myself "rappin'" , and I HATE rap! [eye roll here]. Love it. :)
Benjamin Graber07/06/07
I love it! The style you used made for a very enjoyable read.
Loren T. Lowery07/11/07
This brought a smile to my face today and your obvious talent shined through. I really liked the line about the Master chaning the lock and keys. This was simply fun and creative...keep up the good work!