The Official Writing Challenge
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Great message. Good job!
09/17/06
Very nicely done! I felt those emotions very keenly, and I like your take on the topic.
09/18/06
Very gripping and emotion filled poem. Well done. One thing to think about: watch you use of tense. Stanzas 1-3 are present tense then you drop into past tense. Great resolution. being grateful to be you. A lesson painfully learnt! :-) yeggy
09/20/06
I love the sensation of relief when the stuggles ceased and she called out to God. Do watch for verb tense changes (ie. past vs. present). You portrayed your feelings very nicely.
09/21/06
I liked this. I had a bit of trouble with the meter, but it's also almost 2am, so take that comment for what it's worth. ;) I liked the message you presented. Good job.
09/21/06
Great images here - and a super message. Enjoyed this very much!