The Official Writing Challenge
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This was nicely done and the ending felt very genuine. Try experimenting with your descriptive passages a little more (the line 'the garden was awsome' felt a little clunky), and polish the editing to make this really sparkle. Keep writing! God bless. xx
A lovely and touching story. I can imagine his comfort in the garden. Well done!
HI..just wanted to write and say that I enjoyed reading your short story. It was a wonderful reflective piece with pretty images and drew the reader to the mercy of God! Nice job.
Very nice job here. Excellent concept. There are some very creative sentences and thoughts in this piece. This entry has some problems with comma usage, grammar and sentence structure. You definately know how to tell a good story, involve the reader, and display thoughts creatively. Just keep working and learning the mechanics. You are not far away. You are a writer. Look forward to reading more from you. God bless.