The Official Writing Challenge
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I don't know if the information about the island is true, but it is certainly informative if it is.
Your piece would be a bit easier to read if you leave spaces between paragraphs. You also might want to proofread closer for spelling and punctuation errors.
Thank you for sharing with us.
09/15/06
An interesting story, and the place sounds beautiful. I agree that you can improve this piece by checking your grammar and punctuation. But it is a lovely story, and it warmed my heart.
09/17/06
I was confused about the entire story actually. Though, I do agree with the comment about spacing between sentences. Keep writing!
This a very imaginitive little story. I think it would come to life if you concentrated on the details of maybe one or two of the experiences--there are so many and the changes in time and scenery are a little hard to keep up with. I had to read closely to avoid missing something important. Also, be sure to space after your commas and periods. I enjoyed the creativity and the message that to be unique is something rare and beautiful--and that is what we all need to find within ourselves. Thank you for your story! Keep up the writing! God Bless!
I liked the story, it was well thought out and creative. I agree with all of the others, you need to proofread and work a bit on grammer, then you will blow our socks off with your stories. Keep it up, your creativity only gets better with practice!