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09/09/06
Woo hoo, I love the ending here, and you've got some great figurative language in several places that makes this a really appealing story. And yes, I can relate, too...the empty nest is not always such a bad thing. Good job!
09/09/06
Wonderful! Really good storytelling. An all around great entry! The ending was so cute and sweet. Awesome writing, keep up the good work!
I love the tenderness and playfulness expressed between husband and wife. What a great story!
09/11/06
Really enjoyed this, Jen - especially the ending!! Wonderful job with the dialogue especially!
09/12/06
This is lovely. I can imagine this scenario all too well. Nicely done!
What a tender story. I enjoyed reading this. I especially liked the last line! Blessings.
12/21/06
Sometimes dreams are there for the taking, if we can simply accept them. I like the playful(natural-feeling) of Kate and Steve. The landscape surrounding the cabin was also well drawn, and the lead in to the ending quote was a smooth rhythm.