The Official Writing Challenge
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09/10/06
Old Dan sounds as if he knows how to appreciate not only God's creation, but the Creator, Himself. This poetry has a nice lazy rhythm, rather like Dan. The message demonstrates what we miss in all the busyness of our lives, that special relationship with our Redeemer. Keep writing!
09/11/06
Such a delightful piece of wordsmithing. Loved the simplicity and the beautiful message it portrays. Sixth verse from bottom has an "others" which needs the "s" removed; but otherwise, it is top grade.