The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/06
Well done. You had me hooked from he beginning.
This is a beautiful story, keeping the reader eagerly sweeping the eyes to the next sentence. God specializes in helping us to overcome obstacles in our lives, often through a spouse or close friend. This was a delight to read. Thomas
09/01/06
Beautiful! This was very touching :)
09/01/06
this touched my heart. Thank you for sharing it.
09/02/06
Beautiful ... touching ... the storyline was lovely ... great writing. Well done.
09/03/06
I loved it! I thought the piano was a perfect way for Emma to "see" again. What a wonderful story...thank you for sharing and keep writing. God Bless,Kaye
09/05/06
Beautifully done, Chrissy. Although some of us lose much, God helps us to gain even more. Blessings. Jo :)
09/06/06
Well done, Chrisee. I like the way that the story is circular, returning at the end to an idea from the beginning. It does present a point of view problem but it would have been interesting to connect the conversation James had with the pastor to the arrival of the piano. I assume it is connected, otherwise, if it doesn't add to the story, leave it out. :-) Yeggy
I enjoyed your story! Initially I thought that her husband had died, and then wondered who James was. :) But apparently everyone else got that right off the bat, so that may have just been me! Thanks for ending on a hopeful note. Keep writing!
09/06/06
I liked this story very much. You did a good job of getting the reader's attention.
09/07/06
A lovely, heartwrenching and heartwarming story. It also took me a bit to catch on that she was blind - maybe make it clearer higher up in the story? Other than that, I have NO suggestions. Just wonderful!!
09/07/06
Chrissy,
I was quite intrigued by this story. It stirred memories of a beautiful TV documentary on two autistic children, both blind from birth, and both incredible pianist. I remember well how awestruck I was as I watched their gifts flow through their fingers, creating such lovely music, despite their "physical disadvantages". I believe you have touched upon one of the many miraculous ways God opens so many new doors for us as others sre suddenly closed. Well done, quite heartfelt, and passionate.

Bill
09/08/06
I loved the surprise piano!
And I really enjoyed reading your story. I realize it's hard to expound and develop character in such a strict word limit, but you've done a good job with your plot. Thanks for sharing!