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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Cross (as in the Cross of Christ) (08/17/06)

TITLE: don't look at me (i am the cross)
By Evan Peck
08/21/06


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(A couple of notes:
the “gymnast” metaphor – this is in reference to the physical act that was required of Jesus on the cross to breathe. To prevent suffocation, the crucified must lift their body upwards on the cross for every breath (due to the hanging state). I hate to mention this, but it occurred to me how strange a metaphor it might sound without this prior knowledge.
Also, stylistic changes in the piece with capital letters and punctuation are intentional and serve a purpose)

Title: don't look at me (i am the cross)



i am but wood
i am but ground

don't look at me

touch my hands, my feet, my side
i am but dirt

i stood my post and drank his blood
in stretching agony

as if i could throw him off

i longed to be the austere mother
with dirt-worn aprons and running feet
a wrinkled brow
built by grass stains and skinned knees

"you shouldn't climb trees"

not me
don't look at me

i was carried like an angry child
stiff and heavy
i pushed him to the ground
should man carry his assassin?

via dolorosa
he should not scale the tree

we climbed up the eternal hill
to test eternity with splendor
the carried now the bearing
cradling perfection
with bitter nails

and i knew it
i was there

for the fading gymnast's dire routine
on stabbing bars of steel
yielding half-filled breaths and dwindled strength
a prolonged presence in an anguished world

i was there

i a splintered edge and he a splintered king
cut and carved
scored and seared to who we are
but i am wood and he is king

here i stood and here he fell
a silent symbol bathed in blood
and drowned in tears

i was there

what shadowed farmer plants for death
watering trees
with bones and innocence
burying beauty
among shards of glass and rusted knives
eager
the latter can devour

i was there
when we cried

the weeping wood
the groaning ground
our hands
our hills
our feet
our nails



don't look at me

i am but wood
i am but ground

Glory

i've touched His hands
i've touched His feet
i've touched His side

i am but dirt

Glory


Awaken Firstborn from the Dead

O Triumph shards and rust
O Triumph wood and nail
O Triumph blood and tears

Awaken Morning Star

O Triumph arduous life
O Triumph crushing death
O Triumph ceaseless time

Awake unto the skies

O Triumph me.

Glory

don't look at me

Glory.

Glory.

Glory.



Biblical references:
eternal hills” (Deuteronomy 33:15)
“Firstborn from the Dead” (Revelations 1:5)
“Morning Star” (Revelations 22:16)



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Jan Ackerson 08/27/06
Very, very good!
Trina Courtenay08/28/06
i've added this to my favorites. this is well for lack of better words - AWESOME, AMAZING. you are truly blessed with your writing abilities.
Marty Wellington 08/28/06
Awesome images and very creative arrangement of ideas. Thought-provoking and disturbing at the same time. Bravo!
Corinne Smelker 08/28/06
This is one of the finest pieces of writing I have seen in a long time - and I am not just talking Beginners either.

I really don't think you will be sitting in the Beginner area for long!
Jan Ross08/28/06
You're one talented writer! Very, very good! :)
Donna Emery08/30/06
definitely thought-provoking. Your images were clear and the sensations almost tangible.

A very good job!
Rita Garcia08/30/06
Thank you for sharing your God given talent. It looks like you won't be in beginners for long.
Tabiatha Tallent08/31/06
I loved this. Great piece!
Joanne Sher 08/31/06
Wonderful piece - congratulations on your win!!!
Bonnie Derksen09/01/06
Congratulations on your win, Evan. Very well done.