The Official Writing Challenge
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01/17/05
how very sweet
01/18/05
Love the description of the first kiss. Good job!
01/18/05
I liked the link between your first kiss experience and the idea of things getting in the way of our relationship with Jesus. I am not sure whether you need to format it the way you did. It read as prose and I didn't see the need for separate lines for reach sentence.
I saw this as a very long peice of free verse. There was a nice flow from memory to meditation and back again.
I really liked this. The comparison between missing the first kiss and missing it with God worked well.
01/20/05
I liked the illustration of the first kiss. You probably wouldn't have to separate the sentences as you did. It would have worked in paragraph form just fine. Thanks for sharing.
Ditto to what Lynne said. In addition to that, you made me chuckle in the beginning and then sobered me up at the end for a good message. God bless you.