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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Valley (08/10/06)

TITLE: we will hang our shoes in trees
By Evan Peck
08/16/06


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you once asked what we'd do tomorrow
and the next 'til summer's done
so I answer, "everything, that's all,
until all the world's been won

we'll build tire-swings and tree-forts
and hang our shoes in trees
and build palaces of blankets
to store our fighting dreams

and string cans across two fences
to whisper daring plans
of swings and swords and slides and scandals
with helmet pots and pans

and we'll run until we're laughing
just to fall asleep on hills
as the sky's white dragons turn to grey
and pour our stomachs' fill”

“well, you speak of only mountains
and not of holes,” say you
“there are valleys dark and damp and deep,
where it is void of bright and blue”

“if you go into those valleys,” say I
“and I hope you stay away,
I swear I’ll point you at the sun
when there seems to be no other day

you see
I’ve heard coffee stains build character
and love's no cup o' tea
but we'll unveil a world of wonder

of whistling walks
and bluebird wings
and hanging willow trees"

"okay," you say real softly and smile with your lips
"but as for now, lets dance a dance with lots of spins and dips"


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Jan Ackerson 08/17/06
This is lovely--evocative of e. e. cummings' lighter work.
Julia May08/18/06
This one made me smile! It's wonderful. Thanks. Julia
Joanne Sher 08/19/06
I loved this! So sweet and charming and innocent and wonderful. I"m now tracking you!!! This warmed my heart!
Marilee Alvey08/20/06
This was charming. It spoke to me of childhood. It was just delightful! You have real talent!
Ann Grover08/22/06
Full of imagery and colour. Wonderful. Keep it up.
Helen Paynter08/22/06
Welcome to Fatihwriters! This is very very lovely, and very very good. You don't belong in beginners if this this is representative of your work.
Marilyn Schnepp 08/22/06
The Title caught my eye, then the imagery kept me glued, giving me a taste of childhood once more. Loved it! A great imagination! Keep it up!
Teri Wilson08/22/06
Excellent poetry. I loved every word! Welcome to the challenge.
terri tiffany08/22/06
This was refreshing and totally different than what I usually see here! I loved it! Great job of writing. I wish I had the perfect word to describe your style- whimsical, deligthful???
Venice Kichura08/22/06
very creative poem...flowed nicely
Brenda Kern 08/23/06
This is a good entry. It lost focus near the end, but is filled with charming imagery.
Shari Armstrong 08/23/06
Very vivid imagery of a wonderful summer :) fun stuff!