The Official Writing Challenge
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08/17/06
Very effective repetition in "Janice didn't care." This is a really good piece; work a bit on sentence structure and it will be a great one. Loved your ending.
I liked this, kept me reading to the end. Liked the ending. Keep writing and sharing.
08/24/06
This is very powerful! You really engaged me as a reader. Congrats on making the top 15 in beginners! I'm glad to see you back in the challenge!