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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Valley (08/10/06)

TITLE: A Valley Of Her Own
By Kaye Petts


A Valley Of Her Own

I sat there motionless, my head in a spin, feeling sick to my stomach. I wanted this moment to end, just as all my other bad dreams had.

“Kaye”, my mother’s voice forced me back into reality. “ I want you to be here. I don’t think I’ll be able to hear all that the Dr. is saying.” I could see the fear slowly engulfing her. Inwardly, I felt weak and afraid. Outwardly, seemingly undaunted, I tried to pay attention.

The Dr. ruffled through my mother’s records and lifted his head to speak, “As I was telling your mom, we have found a small area of cancer in her breast.”

My thoughts stopped abruptly at the word “cancer”. I turned and looked at my mom. Her face flushed with anxiety, her head slightly lowered, her fingers twitching, unsettled as though she was getting ready to fly. We sat side by side that day, almost touching, yet I was helpless, unable to save her as she took her first giant step into her valley. I could feel, I could cry, I could comfort, I could pray, but no matter how much I wanted to, I could never step into her valley.

Throughout the next days and weeks, as we were preparing for her surgery, I stood on the edge of her valley, crying out to God. “Lord, she’s been through so much, why this?”

I could barely see my mother below as she automatically placed one foot in front of the other, trudging, oblivious to life outside her valley. Sometimes she would disappear in the darkness. I would call out to her, but her voice, faint from the long journey, seemed so far away. My heart ached at the thought of her walking through this desolate ravine with no way out, alone, no one there in her valley to help her.

Until one day, as I was reaching over the edge once more, I noticed someone else in her valley with her. I cleared my vision, looking closer. Someone was truly there with her, someone illuminating the darkness in front of her, showing her the way, picking her up when she could no longer walk, someone lifting her in lofty wings when the storms raged out of control. This could only be God! I stood amazed.

God had met my mother in her darkest moment and walked her through her valley to the other side, never leaving her, just as he promised, giving her the strength she needed to continue on. I realized that day that God had always been there, ready at any moment to guide and protect. How could I have ever doubted?

I stood on the edge of my valley, looking down into the darkness. My Dr.’s words piercing, “Kaye, we will know your biopsy results by Monday.” I stood there on the edge, getting ready to take my giant step into my valley and there He was, waiting, ready all along. I took His hand……….

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Jan Ackerson 08/17/06
Oh, very good!
terri tiffany08/18/06
This was packed with emotion!! Very nice way to look at valley. You have a little punctuation to clean up but that is nothing since your content shines through so well!! Hope you send this out someplace:)
Marilee Alvey08/19/06
This was a touching story. So many women can relate to this. How helpless we feel when we can't accompany others while they're in the valley. Interestingly, we also cannot help them walk that final stretch between this land and home, either. Everyone has to get there on their own and in their own time.

Keep up the good work.
Mo 08/21/06
Very nice. You should spell out doctor (been there, done that). As I read this, I hoped Kaye wouldn't end up in the same valley as her Mom. --I hope she stays at the edge or only enters that valley very briefly. Well done.
Valerie Routhieaux08/22/06
This is very good. Very good imagry. I walked every step with you and could envision the valley of despair, and hope all at the same time. Good job. Keep writing
Teri Wilson08/23/06
Powerful ending. Loved the last paragraph. Great job.
william price08/24/06
What an incredable story! Well written and moving. I loved it!!! If its a true story, you both will be in my prayers. Great job Kaye. Congratualtions on your win. It is well deserved. God Bless.
Joanne Sher 08/24/06
This is a heartwrenching and hopeful story, wonderfully told. Congratulations on your win!! It is well-deserved.
Sharlyn Guthrie08/24/06
What a great entry! Congratulations! Your win is well-deserved!