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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Valley (08/10/06)

TITLE: Leap Of Faith
By Jerry Ware
08/11/06


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There I stood on the edge of one the greatest sights on planet earth with the wind going through my hair like a small prairie breeze. My eyes gazing upon the very sight that my worst fears are based, a valley that extends more than five miles wide and the depth of three miles. My heartbeat raced faster and faster as I stepped closer to the edge. I dare not look down, but my eyes are drawn to the ever-growing hole that lies before me. Many thoughts going through my head; should I? Shouldn’t I? Why must I do this thing that everyone says for me not to do? You won’t survive they say. It just isn’t worth it.

Fear has always kept me from doing that which I knew to be right. Fear has kept me from going forward in life with so many things I have always wanted to do. And fear has kept me from taking a chance and pursuing the girl of my dreams, but all that ends today, all that ends right now. One leap, one simple jump and it is all gone, the fear, the anxiety, the doubt, all gone within a few short seconds.

My feet seem so heavy and my legs like pillars of stone. I move ever so slowly toward the edge of the cliff. My heart beating so hard it feels like it is going to jump out of my chest. Sweat pouring off of me like midsummer rain in the tropical forest. The wind seems to be picking up and my eyes are beginning to tear. My hands are getting sweaty and my mouth is full of cotton. No turning back now, I have nothing to lose and nothing to go back to, I must go forward and jump. I must jump.

The words echo in my mind and seem to carry for miles inside my head and my body still moving ever so slowly and with a great deal of uncertainty. Fear, powerful and cunning, trying to force me to move back toward the inland. Courage, strength, power, and manhood must prevail …

I MUST DO IT!! I WILL DO IT!! My words echo through the cannon …

With every last bit of self-worth left in me I ran with everything I had toward the ledge and leaped out into the open air.

My body felt so light, so free, and so graceful. The sounds that were all around me seemed to lesson and silence grew within me. A peaceful feeling came over me like loving arms around a newborn baby. The earth is so beautiful, I thought, the greens and blues and different colors of the trees. Oh, if only life could feel like this every waking moment. I knew right then within my heart it had all changed, life is now going to be different. All the fear, doubt, resentment, and pain are all gone with one simple leap of faith. As my body seemingly floated like a fall leaf down toward the green earth below, my mind began to ponder within me. With all the commotion and excitement of this day and hour …

Did I grab the parachute or my backpack?


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D. Phenes08/17/06
never thought it would be so funny. cute.
Jan Ackerson 08/18/06
Awesome ending--thanks for the grin.

An easy way to tighten up on this would be to make the tenses consistent--all past tense or all present tense.

Good job on this one; I was with your narrator every step of the way.
Marilee Alvey08/20/06
Loved it! You got me! Great surprise ending. Nice job!
Valerie Routhieaux08/22/06
I love this. What a thrill ride to the end. You have what it takes to be a truly great writer. Keep it up.
Lynda Schultz 08/23/06
Parachute or backpack - ahhh, the devil is in the details, isn't he? Loved the surprise ending. Very good.