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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Vision (08/03/06)

TITLE: Belle Luna Belle
By Kim Sandstrom
08/07/06


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of all things!

she turned 2,

the week i turned 50!

and now comes the hard part.

i don't get to be nice grandma,

i have to be bad butt mama

to all of her "grabhand", obstreperous activity.

it is not fair i tell you!

i wanted to be the fun, auntie mame grandma

who teaches her about the finer things in life,

instead

i am the worn-out drudge mommy,

with achy hands and arms,

sleepless

hormonal

edgy

and yet...

despite our vast age difference

and the shotgun blast of fate that caused it,

her face lights up like christmas when i come home from the store,

or pick her up in the gym nursery,

or pick her up from her crib...

and when we fall into each other

into the rocking chair,

about 9 in the evening.

the moon shines on us through her bedroom window,

and we blow kisses to the moon.

we are wrapped together in the best blankie

ever made,

and then we pray...

"Our Father Who art in Heaven,

Hallowed be Thy Name,

Thy Kingdom come,

Thy will be done,

on earth as it is in Heaven..."

and by the time we finish our prayers,

she sleeps

in my arms,

and my arms don't hurt anymore.


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Jan Ackerson 08/10/06
Send me a PM or an e-mail, please! I'd love to talk to you a bit about this poem. I love it.
Deborah Ade08/11/06
Nice poem. Funny how the drudgery of everyday life becomes obsolete when a child loves us.
Kaye Petts08/13/06
I love reality. Your heart was part of this and I could hear you with each line. Wonderful....this made me smile :O)Keep writing.
Helen Paynter08/14/06
This is very, very beautiful. My favourite so far this week. I fear it won't do well with the judges, because I don't really see a lot of vision in it, but I am sure it would otherwise.
Becky Depp 08/14/06
I see one "major" problem in this...Vision isn't in it. Unless its me, but I don't see the topic in this entry. Also you didn't capitalize "I" in alot of it. You show potential, but I think with some work with grammar and following the topic, you could have a winning piece.
Marty Wellington 08/15/06
I loved this too, especially since I'm a 46-year-old mom with a 3-year-old! I felt it all around. I liked the lower case "i's" because it de-emphasized the "you" in the setting. Agreed with other comments, however, about the topic. Otherwise, I loved it.
Anne Linington12/20/08
Kim..your poetry is as moving as when you wrote it two years ago. PLEASE if you have the time think about making it more widely available.