The Official Writing Challenge
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08/10/06
Send me a PM or an e-mail, please! I'd love to talk to you a bit about this poem. I love it.
08/11/06
Nice poem. Funny how the drudgery of everyday life becomes obsolete when a child loves us.
08/13/06
I love reality. Your heart was part of this and I could hear you with each line. Wonderful....this made me smile :O)Keep writing.
08/14/06
This is very, very beautiful. My favourite so far this week. I fear it won't do well with the judges, because I don't really see a lot of vision in it, but I am sure it would otherwise.
08/14/06
I see one "major" problem in this...Vision isn't in it. Unless its me, but I don't see the topic in this entry. Also you didn't capitalize "I" in alot of it. You show potential, but I think with some work with grammar and following the topic, you could have a winning piece.
08/15/06
I loved this too, especially since I'm a 46-year-old mom with a 3-year-old! I felt it all around. I liked the lower case "i's" because it de-emphasized the "you" in the setting. Agreed with other comments, however, about the topic. Otherwise, I loved it.
Kim..your poetry is as moving as when you wrote it two years ago. PLEASE if you have the time think about making it more widely available.