The Official Writing Challenge
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08/10/06
Overall, I think this is a good piece. You did a very good job of describing her emotions--anger, dispair--and while I might've enjoyed hearing more about how she brought herself out of it, I still think that it stands well as is. You also had some very nice phrases, like, "Vision is the art of seeing something invisible."

Good job.
You have done a nice job of writing the emotions that many women feel. Unfortunately, friends do betray. Betrayal of those closest to you is sometimes the most difficult to forgive. If this is a true story I pray forgiveness has taken place. You have written a story that many need to read, either for self or to understand what family or friends are going through! Thanks for sharing. Maryolyn Payne
08/10/06
This is heartbreaking but inspiring. And to think you could have killed two birds with one stone...seeing how this weeks challenge is Valley!
08/14/06
This was moving. I was expecting a Scripture verse at the end. The story seems like part of something bigger. Perhaps you will write more on this? It could be a great story of conversion or forgiveness or both. Good work.