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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Thump (05/30/13)

TITLE: Fall of Babylon
By Nancy Bucca
06/06/13
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Skyscrapers once high crumble
For man has willed it so
Staunch sacred structures tumble
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Alienation, desolation
Ever silent desperation
Neglect has worn stone citadels
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Ancient dust-caked carpets
Too tattered to fly on
Bang against cross beams
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

The coins for which men lusted
In coats of rust encrusted
Drop from withered hands
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Their brilliant visage marred
in throes of battle scarred
No melodious clink they make
As from the purse they shake
Let ragged wine skins pour
A beat we can't ignore

Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Hear heaven's heartbeat thirst
Rain well-versed, unrehearsed
A steady strum of sounds
Heavens symphony has burst
Releasing a strong sequence
Of multiple musical notes

Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

They land on roofs and walls
Eroding sandstone towers
Smoothing hardened bricks
Brushstrokes of divine wisdom
Cause battered forms to
Plop one by one onto soft slush

Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Rough shapes lose sharp edges
As they stumble, bumble, mumble
See them teeter, topple, tumble
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Lumps of tarnished silver swathed
In scraps of Achan's grizzled robe
Sink methodically into sunken slough
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Babylon's babbling rabble
Hits vain religious rubble
Struck, it belts a feeble cry
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Edifices founded upon
Uncertain foundations quake
Demonic strongholds break
Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

So bumps the shattered rubble
Bearing a steady message
For anyone with ears to hear
That Babylon is fallen
Crushed beneath the
Weight of many mansions

Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Behold! The New Jerusalem
Descends, enduring lighthouse
Sent from heaven, shining
God's Word to sustain
Storm-tossed believers
With precious truths

Thump, thump. Thump, thump.

Though mountains crumble,
He remains our solid Rock,
Steadfast, certain, faithful,
Never changing and immovable
His body stricken once - just once
To make us, the broken, whole

You don't have to thump your Bible to believe it. Just receive it.

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Note: "Cross beams" refer to the cross of Christ, which puts to shame the dust of worldly wisdom, represented by the carpet.

Many scriptures influenced this poem, including Exodus 17:6, Numbers 20:8, Joshua chapter 7 (in particular verses 20 and 21), John 14:2, I Corinthians 10:4, I John 2:17, Revelation 18:2-8 and Revelation chapter 21 (all based on the KJV version)

Also note: although this poem contains many rhymes, there's no set rhyme scheme per se. Its strength lies in the message, not the pattern.

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Carol Sprock 06/06/13
Though I was slightly put off by the constant thumps, the concept of them representing the backdrop of ongoing building is an excellent one for sound and rhythm as were the many concrete verbs you used. Use of word skyscraper was intriguing. I was set off balance with variations from what seemed deliberate rhyming patterns which then disappeared and others appeared but nothing seemed consistent; same with stanza lengths. Worth spending more time chipping away at it to uncover the sin-to-grace parallels of Bable and New Jerusalem--captivating concept.
Joanne Sher 06/10/13
Definitely a powerful message, and intriguing structure.
CD Swanson 06/13/13
I thought this a brilliant piece that was amazing in depth and overall comprehension. Fantastic!

God bless~
Leola Ogle 06/15/13
Congratulations, Nancy! Wonderful entry.