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Topic: Achoo (04/11/13)

TITLE: The Great Sinus War
By Michelle Knoll
04/18/13
~2nd Place


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"Sir! Sir! We've got casualties! Lots of 'em! What do you want us to do?"

"Get them into that cave over there, Major!"

The general of Red Command didn't have time for this. He was too busy trying to interpret the direction this particular battle was heading.

"Sergeant! Get on the horn to headquarters! Find out when they can send us reinforcements!"

"Yes, Sir!" The sergeant quickly dialed Central Command. In minutes he had an answer, but it was bad news. "No reinforcements for at least another 6 hours, Sir! They say it's too soon!"

Too soon!? How did they expect him to fight off this enemy, anyway? The general rubbed his forehead, and studied the topo map again. Sure, his troops had acted quickly to secure the caves. They'd only had one break in their lines north of the mountains, but they had recaptured that territory quickly. However, he was very concerned. Rumor had it the enemy was making its way to Eustachian Valley. If they created a base there, this war was going to get ugly fast.

"Six hours," he muttered to himself. "That's a long time for my men to hold their own." Straightening his back, he let out a heavy sigh. One solution might buy them some time. Gravely, he looked at his sergeant.

"Call headquarters again. We need the Ghosts."

The air took on a much more solemn tone as the sergeant announced: "The Ghosts will be here within the hour, Sir."

Just then another soldier by his behavior, obviously a private appeared at the tent's door.

"Sir! All casualties are in the west caves as ordered, Sir. Radar has detected the source of the attack, and we're mobilizing units to counter attack."

"What are they using this time?"

"L-R-Gen, Sir. Pretty nasty stuff."

The general grimaced. Yes, nasty indeed. "All right. Anything else?"

The soldier hesitated.

"What's the problem, son?"

"Well, Sir, there's been talk about the geyser."

The general frowned. "And?"

"Well, Sir, the men are scared. They're concerned the geyser might blow while we're fighting. A lot of them have never experienced it, Sir. They're afraid Well, Sir, you know."

It was clear even the young man was afraid. The general placed a hand on his shoulder. "Well, son, if the geyser blows, the geyser blows. There's not much we can do about that. We just need to stay focused, and pray for the best. Got that, soldier?"

The soldier stepped back and gave the general a salute that would make any CO proud. "Yes, Sir!"

With a flash, the young man raced back across the ravine, slipping a couple of times as he went. The general watched him until he disappeared.

"They get younger and younger every year," he muttered to himself.

The Ghosts arrived as requested. They were a mysterious sort called the "White Cell." No one in Red Command really understood how they did what they did, but their methods were effective. Their commander, a general decorated with many war medals, assured the general of Red Command that his men would use every chemical in their arsenal to attack the enemy, and they would win.

Suddenly, the ground started to tremble.

"It's the geyser!" the sergeant shouted, his eyes full of fear.

The tremors came in waves, rapidly, as the men scrambled to protect themselves. Then hot winds, at speeds close to 200 mph, tore through the ravine, almost sucking the general's tent into the fray. The sound the rushing gale made was so loud the men couldn't hear their own voices. Bits of debris whipped past the tent opening, dangerous projectiles that would impale anything in their path without remorse. Rain ensued afterward, drenching the entire area.

Once the wind ceased, the two generals shook hands and quickly resumed their separate duties. As the White Cell commander vanished into the recesses of the ravine, the general of Red Command barked orders at his sergeant.

"Check in with all units, Sergeant! Let's see how bad that geyser hurt us!"

"Yes Sir, General!"

The general checked his watch. A little over four more hours, and they would have reinforcements. Special forces called "Anti Hista Men." He closed his eyes and prayed. Hopefully, his men and the Ghosts would be able to hold things together until then.

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dub W04/22/13
Interesting word play. I can see the effort here.
Yvonne Blake 04/23/13
Ha Ha Ha! I loved it! I never thought of personifying antibodies and white blood cells. . . and the geyser! Great writing!
Dana Anders04/23/13
Very clever indeed, and so very well written. I really enjoyed reading this.
Judith Gayle Smith04/23/13
Very fresh and unique. Most enjoyable.
lynn gipson 04/24/13
Very unique take on the topic. Funny and excellent writing. Ver well done.
Christina Banks 04/24/13
I enjoyed your cleaver story. Lots of fun, and such a unique perspective. Thank you.
Alicia Renkema04/24/13
This was a clever story indeed! Boy, this is pretty darn good if it is not your best. The dialogue had such good pacing, it was intriguing all the way through. The only thing I wasn't quite sure of was who the Ghosts were -- was that the Trinity gone in to help the poor sinus sufferer? I have suffered with sinus over the years -- give me a drippy nose anytime over not being able to get anything out. This was very well written. Blessings to you.
Lori Dixon 04/25/13
LOL funny ... very, very clever and well written! Congrats!
Christina Banks 04/25/13
Congratulations on your EC!
Alicia Renkema04/25/13
No casualty here -- only victory, pure and clear... Congrats on your placing first in your level and on your EC win. Way to write! God's blessings to you.
Bea Edwards 04/25/13
Creative and fun. It was easy to picture the geyser blowing and taking casualties. I'm a 'let er rip' kind of sneezer. Take no prisoners is my motto.
Well done and congratulations!
Judith Gayle Smith04/26/13
So imaginative! Congratulations!
Cheryl Harrison 04/26/13
Very creative. I was right there with your characters in the slippery war zone. Did I say, "yuck". Creative way to write the topic. Well deserved win. Congrats on your 1st place in your level and your 2nd place editors choice award. Keep writing.
Vince Martella04/26/13
Congrats on such an imaginative, well done story!