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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Outlook (06/02/11)

TITLE: The Lost Smile
By Melanie Kerr
06/09/11
~2nd Place


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I lost my smile
Today
It was on my face when
I left home this morning
I saw it reflected in the shop window
When I ran my fingers
Through my hair

I had it when I
Climbed on the bus
It wasnít tucked away
In my back pocket
Like my bus ticket
Reserved for only a
Select few to see

I had it when I
Walked through the school gates
Unlike others I donít
Put away my smile
And drag out a scowl
Pretending I hate school
Stifling enthusiasm, scraping by

I lost my smile
At precisely 8.55 am
In assembly
In the half light of
A slide presentation
Too many images of
Things that should never be

I felt my smile slip
When I saw the picture
Of a boy sitting on a bed
Every bone visible
Arms and legs stripped of
Fat and muscle
Eyes stripped of hope

My smile disappeared
Replaced by the urge to weep
Things that should never be
Are allowed to be
We blame God
And pardon ourselves
And injustice struts unchallenged

I lost my smile
Today
But
I found my heart
Not as cold and hard
As I imagined
It began to beat

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Margaret Kearley 06/10/11
This beautifully worded poem really touches the heart with its reality and truth.
Charla Diehl 06/10/11
As the MC's eyes opened to others who are suffering, changes took place inside his/her heart. The challenge to get involved for the sake of making this world a better place for all gives birth to hope for better tomorrows.
Sarah Elisabeth 06/12/11
Wow. Enjoyed the route you took to get to this message. So real.

"We blame God
And pardon ourselves"

I'm going to remember this line!
Colin Swann06/13/11
Lovely - really enjoyed this meainingful and well crafted piece. Thanks!
Mona Purvis06/14/11
I truly enjoyed reading this piece. One of those which has the power to change the reader, just as the MC was changed.

Mona
Rachel Phelps06/14/11
Fabulous. The word choices and flow are sublime. Excellent work!
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/14/11
"Injustice struts unchallenged"--my favorite of your excellent phrasings. This is an outstanding poem, including the messsage.
Ann Grover06/15/11
Excellent message, profound phrasings. I enjoyed this immensely.
diana kay06/16/11
wow! a winner for me!! so many great lines i like particularly the thought of the smile hidden in the back pocket like a bus ticket :-)
this could be a poem about anorexia..particularly with the image of the thin person.I am glad that you ended slighly upbeat.
you jolted us out of our smugness just like the MC was...awesome!
diana kay06/16/11
YAY!!! fantastic :-) congrats on being 2nd in the EC
Benjamin Graber06/16/11
Wow, Melanie - this is excellent! Your poem is very moving and an inspiring reminder to remember what others are going through. Congratulations on your EC award!
Lisa Johnson 06/16/11
such a moving message in a very well crafted poem... well deserved level and EC placement... congratulations
Carol Penhorwood 06/16/11
Deeply moving and so well crafted! Congratulations!
Bonnie Bowden06/16/11
Congratulations Melanie on your 2nd place EC award for a deep and inspiring poem.

There are too many memorable lines to quote.
Rachel Phelps06/16/11
I'm glad this one placed so high. Great work and congratulations!
Kate Oliver Webb06/16/11
Of COURSE this was a winner! So beautifully constructed with technical skill and artistic touch. But the message--oh, the message! I was in tears. Thank you for speaking to my heart through your wonderful gift.
Amanda Brogan06/20/11
DEFINITELY a great outlook. To be thankful for the blessings in our lives while realizing that there have been and are those who suffer in the world.

Great job and congrats on your win!