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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Ow! (01/07/10)

TITLE: What's That You Say?
By Michelle Knoll
01/07/10
~9th Place


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The British cabby spied the well-dressed businessman approaching the curb, talking on his cell, a grim look across his face. Eager to impress, the cabby swiftly maneuvered his taxi into position. As the passenger opened the door to get in, the cabby proudly exclaimed, “'Ow's tha' for service, guv'ner!” However, the passenger was so engrossed in his cell phone conversation, he didn't hear the proud cabby's comment.

“Yeah, well, that's going to be one huge doctor's bill,” the man said on his cell phone, as he got inside the taxi. The cabby looked in the rear-view mirror, and waited for the man to say where he needed to go.

Seeing the waiting glance in the mirror up front, the man told the other phone party to hold on, and then told the cabby, “Covent Garden.” With practiced skill, the cabby maneuvered his taxi out into the traffic and proceeded on his way.

“Well, let me know what the doctor says about this one,” the man concluded, and then closed his cell phone. Sitting back against the seat, he sighed noticeably.

“Trouble, guv'ner?” the cabby said, to make conversation.

“Eh, yeah. One of my lighting techs got injured today.”

“'Ow?” the cabby exclaimed curiously.

The man chuckled dryly. “Yeah, he's in some pain, all right.”

“Beg pardon, but I mean... 'OW did he get hurt?”

The man realized his mistake and corrected. “Oh, he fell while rigging one of the lighting beams.”

“'Ow?”

The man eyed the cabby, uncertain of the meaning. “He... was on a ladder, and... lost his balance.”

The cabby winced. “Ow!” he commented, staring at the traffic in front of him.

Perplexed at the cabby's response, but willing to oblige the driver's concern, he continued to describe the scene. “He... leaned out too far to position the barn doors on a light, and that's when it happened.”

“Ow,” said the cabby, thoughtfully.

The businessman stared at the cabby, bewildered that the man was asking yet again for more details. “Well, for this one particular scene, the light had to focus on a very small part of the stage. When he leaned out to set that light, the ladder moved underneath him. Then, as he moved back to steady the ladder, it fell. It was a rather tall ladder. He landed on his left arm and leg. They think both might be broken.”

Arriving at the destination, the cabby swiftly pulled the taxi to the curb. Turning to face his passenger in the back seat, his wide-open eyes and one-word response told his reaction to the painful story:

“OW!”

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Colin Swann01/14/10
Enjoyed this story and the cabbie who dropped the 'h' on how. Brilliant and quirky use of Ow! Thanks - Colin
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/14/10
I loved it! i was smiling the whole time I read it.
Shann
Amanda Brogan01/14/10
Now this is the "quirky" kind of story that they were probably expecting (according to the message boards) when they chose the topic "ow!" Very funny and creative! I absolutely adore British accents, so the British cabby is a fun character for me to read about. :) Hilarious dialogue!
Linda Germain 01/14/10
Very well done! So cute. Wish I'd thought of it. :0)
Lisha Hunnicutt01/14/10
Great article! This cracked me up! Very creative take on "Ow!" Loved it!!
Joan Campbell01/15/10
Lovely humour. Nice to read something so lighthearted on a "painful" topic.
01/15/10
Ha! Great humor! I never would have thought to write something like this for OW! I enjoyed this much.
DANIEL MBAJIORGU01/16/10
A beautiful, dramatic prose or piece of writing. You strike me as a very good writer with bright prospects. Excellent plot, excellent story and so well connected to the topic. I personally think this is one of the best articles I have read in this level. And it doesn't quite sound Level 1. Keep it up!
Michelle Knoll 01/18/10
Thank you to all of you for the wonderful comments! I had fun with this one. The idea came rather quickly, and flowed pretty easily. That doesn't usually happen for me, so this was exciting! Thanks again! Blessings to all!
Jan Ackerson 01/18/10
Having spent some time in Covent Garden a few years ago, I really loved this! And I loved your take on "ow" with the Cockney dialect. Clever writing!

I've started a class in the FaithWriters forums for Beginner and Intermediate writers. I'd love to see you there--look for "Jan's Writing Basics".

You're a rising star, I think!
Jesus Puppy 01/19/10
Very good, Michelle, had me giggling.
Joy Bach 01/20/10
Very good. Having been in England, I could just hear the cabby. Chuckled all the way through.
Lisa Johnson 01/21/10
Very nicely done. A very unique take on the subject of "Ow!" Congratulations on a well deserved win , both on your level...and in the Editor's Choice!!!
Michelle Knoll 01/21/10
I... am overwhelmed. Thank you, all, for the kind and gracious comments. I really don't know what to say about the award. Wow.
Carol Penhorwood 01/21/10
Congratulations on your 2nd place win! How awesome! Very creative and highly entertaining! Super job!
Rachel Dorsey01/21/10

I think this was the best one I read so far in regards to the subject matter.

I am partial to British accents and characters so this was an enjoyable read. So well-written. I hardly can't say anything in way of a critique!
Leah Nichols 01/23/10
LOL!!! Kept me smiling the whole way through. Nicely done, and congrats on your placement!